I agree with Scott, tone down the About Me a little bit. Talk about you playing guitar, especially if that's your passion (since you have a photo of you playing).
Also, I would ditch the model pose and use your guitar picture as your first picture. If you can, replace your headshot with something less grainy. Of all the tests I've done, the head shot performs fairly okay as the first photo but is used best as a backup photo. Definitely use the guitar picture as your main because it's interesting and different. It will help you stand out.
You talk about traveling to just about everywhere yet you don't have any traveling photos. That makes you sound incredibly incongruent and try hard.
If your personality is over the top then you can definitely keep using some of your About Me, but if you're not over the top then ditch the entire thing and start from scratch. Because it's not you; it's fake.
Tell us more about who you are as a person, start there and then tune it up. Make a first draft that's boring, but honest and then worry about making it sound good. Even post it as a reply to this thread and then we can give you tips on sprucing it up. But honestly, I'd ditch your whole About Me, unless you really are over the top which means you only need to tune it up a little bit.
Cheers!
