Online & Apps My take on an Online profile

[Anonymous]

Mind you I'm actually looking for a relationship here and not just to hook up so I changed the tone up a bit.

While I may sing at work they only pay me to run a kitchen for a catering company. I toss the singing in for free. Much to the delight of my co-workers! I'm also working on my degree in Criminal Justice here in Cedar Rapids with an emphasis in forensic psych. So if you're a nut bar, I'll know! I'm pretty good at being a smart ass so keep up! Depending on who you ask, I dance like a retard too...I was bustin' a move one night when one of my friends stopped me and said, "Don't ever do that in public again!" Apparently my Temptations impression is highly inappropriate in certain venues! Eh screw'em, I was having fun! Moved to the area not too long ago and still finding all kinds of things to do in my down time. We can talk about that later. But if you are late it's gonna be chicken nuggets at McDonalds

I'm looking for a girl who has a little bit of a sassy side in her, good conversational skills, good manners, is affectionate, and won't bore me to death! Oh and if you can make me say\think "Damn!" when (if) I kiss you, I find that simply impossible to ignore. Lets be honest here and just admit that looks do matter. You don't wanna date Sasquatch anymore than I do!

My family is also something that is very important to me. One of the most important lessons I've learned from them is finding happiness in life. Forget what others may think and cherish what you have that is of real value.

I'll end this by saying I don't need a woman... I want one. There is a difference.

Comments... suggestions?
Love it... Hate it?

I like the energy of the 1st paragraph but wonder if it's too entertaining. The remainder is there because I also wanted to add a bit that isn't as "joking" and show a more serious side too.

 

[mjk1234]

Hey, Shokan.

First of all, a typo, "Lets be honest here and just admit" needs to be "Let's..."

I really liked your first two sentences. They show a playful side that I think women find attractive.

I'm not sure you should include the part about dancing like an idiot. You don't want to disqualify yourself in the first paragraph to women who enjoy dancing.

Your last paragraph seems a little cliched. I read a lot of women's profiles that say the same thing.