Socializing Pick-up failed for bold texting?

[davex]

I'd like to ask you an opinion about something that happened today to me.

I'm 36 yo. Yesterday afternoon while commuting back from work I picked up a girl on the underground train. I started by looking at her while she was combing her hair with her hands, then she started to look back at me and we ended smiling each other, I presented myself, congratulated for her beautiful hair and then we went on chatting amicably for a while. She was about 25 yo. I suggested we exchanged phone numbers and she agreed, then after some stops she stepped down.

This morning I've sent to her the following text:

"Hi! I'm stuck in a meeting and I cannot stop thinking about you caressing your beatiful black hair!...wow! We should drink something together, pronto. How's your schedule for next week?"

At noon I've been called by her father who told me it was not the case to send such messages to people known around and asking to definitely delete her number and never contact her again.

I've done as asked, of course, but I'd like to have your opinion on what happened, as I've just started to pick up girls trying to follow the strategies of this excellent site, and maybe I did something wrong and want to correct myself.

However I do not think to have been bold or unpolite in my texting, maybe a bit daring...but I wouldn't say this is necessarily negative...
Besides, I've been surprised to be contacted by her father when she could have called or texted me directly, as she's a grown woman.

What do you think of the above? Is it my fault or I fell in a "strange" situation? I feel that what happened is somehow discouraging me from further pick ups...

Sorry for my English (it is not my mothertongue) and thanks to everyone for the replies.

 

[Franco]

davex,

Not that this would have necessarily changed the outcome, but it sounds like you waited too long to send her a text, and when you did, it was overly wordy and aggressive (with another compliment). I generally leave those types of compliments to in-person interactions.

Instead, it would have been best to send her a text within a few hours after meeting her saying something along the lines of, "Hey Shelly, it was great meeting you at the train stop today. Save my number - Dave"

She'll likely respond to that text with something along the lines of, "it was great meeting you too! "

Then sometime the next day, it would be best to just jump right into the thick of things and text her with something along the lines of, "We should grab a (coffee/drink) sometime this week, Shelly! What's your schedule like? " From there, you can organize a meet-up.

Again, this may not have affected whether or not the father intervened, but you can't let something like that stop you. It's pretty rare that a girl who is 25 years old is allowing her father to see her phone, so I wouldn't consider that to be anything common. Just pick yourself up, go out, and do it again. =)

- Franco

 

[davex]

Franco,

thank you very much for your valuable reply which will help me to avoid the same mistakes. I see I have still a lot to learn!

Dave